****PAFOA Representation**** Harrisburg Capitol Building, 9/24 and 9/25

[alpacaheat]

it isn't a bad thing to have 100 guys the size of 160 when your trying to fill a room... jussayin.

OK, put me and Bern at the front of the line. 160 of me is about the size of 100 normal-sized men.

[alpacaheat]

- Headline needs to be enlarged much more than it currently is on the PDF.

- I'd remove the "On" and just use the dates as a sub header. (I added the year, but that's up to you)

- It has very little to identify WHAT the urgent action is in regards to, so perhaps enlarge the portion "We need..." (as shown below)

- Most of the rest is OK, barring a few lines of text that should be adjusted so there isn't a huge line across leaving just a few words on the second line of the sentence. (hard to explain in layman's terms and I don't know the technical terms - I just know how to do it)

Note: I'm limited by the forum editing tools, but this is the gist of what I would suggest for changes to add impact.

URGENT CALL TO ACTION!
September 24th and 25th, 2019
We need EVERY Pennsylvania gun owner
and second amendment supporter
to come to the capitol building to show support and
provide a voice to maintain FREEDOM in Pennsylvania!

Good edits. Bern's reviewing this weekend and we'll finish it up on Monday.

[alpacaheat]

Thanks Empty.
Can you do the rest of it and post or PM, even if just basic design, you have the touch.
It may also help to shorten a lot of the wording used in the pdf and make it more direct and to the point.

I do try to pack a lot into anything I do. My radio spot for example...probably the most action-packed informational 5 minutes of the week Lets hope someone remembered at least a quarter of it.

With words though...maybe too much.

[Emptymag]

Another variation on the header...
(it's hard to format exactly how I would like, but note the font size/color differences)

WE NEED Pennsylvania GUN OWNERS
and SECOND AMENDMENT SUPPORTERS

[Berncly]

I do try to pack a lot into anything I do. My radio spot for example...probably the most action-packed informational 5 minutes of the week Lets hope someone remembered at least a quarter of it.

With words though...maybe too much.

Making the effort and getting the word out is good enough, doesn't need to be perfect delivery to get the point across.
The Liberals just scream and ramble made up statistics and false narratives, nobody cares and everyone gets their point.
We all need to stand up and speak up while we still can, protect the 2A any way we can, don't worry about perfection.

Any flier is better than none, we are just lucky to have Empty on the team with his design skills, may as well put them to use.
I really appreciate your taking the initiative and making the effort, I hope it inspires others to stand up and help us protect the 2A for the benefit of us all.

[CoalcrackerAl]

What is the SB numbers of these bills?

[LBaker]

What is the SB numbers of these bills?

Anything you need to know. It's a wonderful resource. https://foac-pac.org/Proposed-Pennsy...te-Legislation

[CoalcrackerAl]

Yes indeed it is. That is what im using to read the bills. I want to know what bills exactly they are going to be discussing in sept.

[m16ark56]

I had better start asking around! I'm hoping to find someone in my "neck of the woods" who would want to go for the two days. I'm glad I saw the notice on gab.ai

[m16ark56]

LOOKS GOOD TO ME!